1 00:00:07,010 --> 00:00:10,490 Problem in not directly addressing the question. 2 00:00:10,760 --> 00:00:12,540 So what I want you to do, I want you to take two. 3 00:00:12,560 --> 00:00:14,210 I want you to take 3 minutes. 4 00:00:15,440 --> 00:00:21,560 And I want you to read these read these two body paragraphs, and I want you to tell me. 5 00:00:22,070 --> 00:00:28,040 Look at the body paragraphs and be able to tell me how it does not address the question. 6 00:00:28,040 --> 00:00:29,540 Yeah, the failure. 7 00:00:30,200 --> 00:00:34,160 The failure is, is exactly what Marco improvised. 8 00:00:35,090 --> 00:00:39,230 If I say your name wrong, I'm sorry, but it is not. 9 00:00:39,350 --> 00:00:43,010 When you look at these paragraphs, it does not tell. 10 00:00:43,010 --> 00:00:44,510 You have no idea. 11 00:00:45,860 --> 00:00:47,450 You have no idea. 12 00:00:47,720 --> 00:00:54,200 If the author feels that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, you have no idea. 13 00:00:56,080 --> 00:01:04,120 In Body one, the author just stated The advantages embodied to the author just stated disadvantages. 14 00:01:04,840 --> 00:01:07,300 But you have no idea. 15 00:01:08,610 --> 00:01:12,300 You have no idea which side the author is on. 16 00:01:12,600 --> 00:01:14,740 Now look at the paragraphs. 17 00:01:14,760 --> 00:01:15,390 Now. 18 00:01:16,590 --> 00:01:21,510 And when you look at these two paragraphs, you can clearly see. 19 00:01:23,150 --> 00:01:30,080 The author's opinion, you can clearly see how the author thinks about whether or not the advantages 20 00:01:30,080 --> 00:01:31,350 outweigh the disadvantages. 21 00:01:31,370 --> 00:01:32,840 Look at the language. 22 00:01:35,680 --> 00:01:42,010 Right now, the paragraphs are specifically addressing the question. 23 00:01:42,220 --> 00:01:47,680 When you read these two paragraphs, you're really clear where the author stands. 24 00:01:48,520 --> 00:01:54,040 This is the difference between being inside the box of the question and being outside the box of the 25 00:01:54,040 --> 00:01:54,730 question. 26 00:01:54,910 --> 00:01:55,260 Right. 27 00:01:55,270 --> 00:01:55,990 So. 28 00:01:57,880 --> 00:02:00,670 You have to be able to write in a way. 29 00:02:01,320 --> 00:02:02,730 Where you are. 30 00:02:03,950 --> 00:02:05,690 Answering the question, everybody. 31 00:02:06,780 --> 00:02:08,140 It's all done through language. 32 00:02:08,240 --> 00:02:08,580 All right. 33 00:02:08,580 --> 00:02:11,760 There is the essay question in blue above. 34 00:02:13,150 --> 00:02:18,850 Computers are being used more and more in education, and so there will soon be no role for the teacher 35 00:02:18,850 --> 00:02:19,520 in education. 36 00:02:19,540 --> 00:02:21,490 To what extent do you agree or disagree? 37 00:02:21,870 --> 00:02:22,120 Right. 38 00:02:22,120 --> 00:02:23,770 Take one minute and read the paragraph. 39 00:02:23,890 --> 00:02:25,360 And I want you to tell me. 40 00:02:25,930 --> 00:02:27,370 I want you to tell me. 41 00:02:27,370 --> 00:02:31,960 How does this paragraph fail to address the question? 42 00:02:33,020 --> 00:02:36,800 How does this paragraph fail to address the question? 43 00:02:36,800 --> 00:02:41,600 Yeah, the role the teacher and the teacher is not addressed. 44 00:02:41,630 --> 00:02:42,890 The topic is not addressed. 45 00:02:42,920 --> 00:02:44,180 Now, let me ask you this. 46 00:02:44,180 --> 00:02:45,650 This this the next part. 47 00:02:45,680 --> 00:02:51,980 What part of the process what can cause a student to make a mistake and write this way? 48 00:02:52,010 --> 00:02:54,000 Not analyzing the question very well. 49 00:02:54,000 --> 00:02:54,680 That's one. 50 00:02:54,680 --> 00:02:57,430 And what else you have rushing to write the answer? 51 00:02:57,530 --> 00:02:59,480 Yeah, that's the reason why they rush. 52 00:03:01,140 --> 00:03:07,080 And when somebody rushes, that means they did not do question analysis properly and it means they did 53 00:03:07,080 --> 00:03:09,090 not do what outlined. 54 00:03:11,550 --> 00:03:16,200 Now look at the paragraph now and you can see this is a paragraph. 55 00:03:17,360 --> 00:03:22,760 This is a paragraph where the question is specifically addressed. 56 00:03:23,000 --> 00:03:30,560 But when you look at this paragraph, you should be able to see how the question is specifically and 57 00:03:30,560 --> 00:03:33,510 directly addressed throughout the entire paragraph. 58 00:03:33,530 --> 00:03:36,800 This is what it looks like when you answer the question. 59 00:03:38,040 --> 00:03:43,320 And don't just talk about it in a general way or just talk about the topic of computers. 60 00:03:43,590 --> 00:03:46,680 It's all about the language in terms of answering the question. 61 00:03:46,920 --> 00:03:48,630 Also, I underlined. 62 00:03:49,540 --> 00:03:54,040 Underlined the linking language that was used here. 63 00:03:54,040 --> 00:04:00,460 You could really see like that first sentence is a complex sentence despite the second sentence as a 64 00:04:00,460 --> 00:04:02,310 complex sentence, despite with. 65 00:04:02,350 --> 00:04:07,990 Although the third sentence narrows what was done in the previous sentence with connecting language 66 00:04:07,990 --> 00:04:11,860 more specifically, even in the face of. 67 00:04:12,610 --> 00:04:13,900 To exemplify. 68 00:04:14,200 --> 00:04:19,480 So this is this is a this is what a well structured paragraph looks like. 69 00:04:22,250 --> 00:04:24,100 Our next step is problem 12. 70 00:04:24,110 --> 00:04:29,290 Final problem going to address is lack of proofreading your work. 71 00:04:29,300 --> 00:04:37,340 I talked about this earlier when I talked about timing and I said you want to take about 5 minutes in 72 00:04:37,340 --> 00:04:44,180 the beginning to do a question, analysis and outline, take 30 minutes to write and save yourself, 73 00:04:44,180 --> 00:04:45,800 5 minutes to proofread all. 74 00:04:45,920 --> 00:04:51,170 Now, proofreading correction is much easier on the computer version than the paper version because 75 00:04:51,170 --> 00:04:53,450 you're typing, but it can be done on both. 76 00:04:53,450 --> 00:04:55,580 But it's way easier on the computer version. 77 00:04:59,740 --> 00:05:03,670 What to look for when you're proofreading your identify. 78 00:05:03,700 --> 00:05:05,770 Typical weaknesses that you have. 79 00:05:06,820 --> 00:05:09,850 Everyone should know their weaknesses. 80 00:05:09,850 --> 00:05:11,650 We all have our weaknesses. 81 00:05:12,770 --> 00:05:21,800 I'll give you one of my weaknesses for for some reason, my hands whenever I want to type the word from. 82 00:05:22,130 --> 00:05:24,860 For some reason I keep typing the word form. 83 00:05:25,610 --> 00:05:33,380 I don't know why I have trouble with typing that word the right way when I'm typing quickly. 84 00:05:34,310 --> 00:05:36,320 So when I finish writing something. 85 00:05:37,370 --> 00:05:44,480 I specifically go back and look, if I use that word, I use the word form when I should have been using 86 00:05:44,480 --> 00:05:49,400 the word from, because I've identified that as something that I make a mistake in doing. 87 00:05:50,310 --> 00:05:52,110 In writing sometimes. 88 00:05:52,710 --> 00:05:55,560 But all of you should know your identified weaknesses. 89 00:05:55,830 --> 00:06:03,450 You want to look for a weak or low level vocabulary, repeated language, sentence variety, eliminating 90 00:06:03,450 --> 00:06:10,020 weak verbs, checking the relevancy, which means are you answering the question? 91 00:06:10,020 --> 00:06:15,150 What I just talked about before, your organization and your coherence language that you're using. 92 00:06:15,450 --> 00:06:17,790 This is what you look for when you're proofreading. 93 00:06:17,910 --> 00:06:21,170 But like I said, you've got to give yourself 5 minutes to be able to do that. 94 00:06:21,220 --> 00:06:21,530 All right. 95 00:06:21,540 --> 00:06:25,560 So also, how to stop making the same mistakes. 96 00:06:27,200 --> 00:06:32,870 Work on, proofreading your work, proofread it yourself, and then use a program like Grammarly to 97 00:06:32,870 --> 00:06:33,650 proofread it. 98 00:06:33,950 --> 00:06:36,290 But try proofreading it yourself first. 99 00:06:37,160 --> 00:06:40,730 If you're using grandma only do not allow it to correct the mistakes for you. 100 00:06:41,420 --> 00:06:45,710 Once you've identified the mistakes, go back and rewrite that sentence on your own to try to correct 101 00:06:45,710 --> 00:06:46,070 it. 102 00:06:46,950 --> 00:06:50,940 Then use a program like Grammarly to go back and check if the correction was made. 103 00:06:52,080 --> 00:06:54,270 Study and master the mistake area. 104 00:06:56,040 --> 00:06:58,860 So, you know, you have to be able to really work on that. 105 00:07:00,760 --> 00:07:02,770 Again, I'm a big proponent of. 106 00:07:03,190 --> 00:07:04,510 I don't get paid by them. 107 00:07:04,510 --> 00:07:05,230 I'm not. 108 00:07:05,410 --> 00:07:06,670 I get nothing from them. 109 00:07:06,670 --> 00:07:12,700 I think they just have a great service when it comes to allowing students to be able to see their mistakes 110 00:07:12,700 --> 00:07:13,600 that they're making. 111 00:07:15,710 --> 00:07:15,920 Right. 112 00:07:16,070 --> 00:07:22,730 So this is an example of when you're using Grammarly, the kind of corrections that defines and defines 113 00:07:22,730 --> 00:07:23,210 for you. 114 00:07:28,420 --> 00:07:28,810 All right. 115 00:07:28,810 --> 00:07:31,150 So thank you very much for joining me today. 116 00:07:31,720 --> 00:07:39,400 I hope you learned a lot about being able to upgrade your writing and being able to avoid the kind of 117 00:07:39,400 --> 00:07:43,180 avoid the mistakes that students typically make. 118 00:07:44,260 --> 00:07:51,850 Have a fantastic weekend and take care of yourself if you have any questions you can ask me in the course.