1 00:00:00,810 --> 00:00:01,370 All right. 2 00:00:01,380 --> 00:00:04,710 Now we can go ahead and move forward and pick up where we left off. 3 00:00:04,890 --> 00:00:12,300 We're looking at reviewing body paragraphs so that we can really point out to you exactly how the examiner 4 00:00:12,300 --> 00:00:15,390 expects you to structure a body paragraph. 5 00:00:15,900 --> 00:00:20,520 So in the previous lecture, we were looking at this. 6 00:00:21,370 --> 00:00:29,350 This, but these body paragraphs here dealing with the request to reduce fossil fuel consumption. 7 00:00:29,860 --> 00:00:36,910 And now here you can look at it with the introduction and the conclusion at the bottom. 8 00:00:37,300 --> 00:00:43,900 But here we have a complete a complete essay and it falls. 9 00:00:44,260 --> 00:00:48,640 Like I said, every essay is going to fall under 300 words. 10 00:00:49,540 --> 00:00:52,030 Every essay will fall into 300 words. 11 00:00:52,360 --> 00:00:55,130 You have to be able to write very concisely. 12 00:00:55,150 --> 00:01:03,730 That's why using a lot of function words instead of all, instead of relying heavily on content words 13 00:01:04,000 --> 00:01:06,550 is a big mistake that a lot of students make. 14 00:01:06,550 --> 00:01:15,610 When you use a lot of function words, the prepositions, the articles, the weak verbs is r was where 15 00:01:16,030 --> 00:01:28,240 those those words create unnecessarily long sentences and high level writing is really supposed to use 16 00:01:28,240 --> 00:01:34,090 a minimum amount of content words, a function of words. 17 00:01:34,240 --> 00:01:36,790 And in my writing, that's what you really see. 18 00:01:37,240 --> 00:01:40,420 That's why it looks so, so compact. 19 00:01:40,780 --> 00:01:50,320 That's why it looks so tight, is because there's I try my best to not waste any words, because that's 20 00:01:50,320 --> 00:01:59,680 going to allow me to say a lot more, a lot more and fit within the word limit restrictions that I think 21 00:01:59,680 --> 00:02:00,850 are appropriate. 22 00:02:04,200 --> 00:02:09,960 Now in this next one, this is where this is the question that was talking about advice. 23 00:02:11,160 --> 00:02:20,700 And do you want to seek experience, advice to solve a problem or do you want to look forward to doing 24 00:02:20,700 --> 00:02:24,750 Internet research to locate some suggestions to help you with your problem? 25 00:02:24,750 --> 00:02:28,050 Which one do you think is the best option? 26 00:02:28,770 --> 00:02:37,500 So here we have the two body paragraphs and again, I'm highlighting for you the topic sentence is the 27 00:02:37,500 --> 00:02:38,580 details. 28 00:02:39,690 --> 00:02:45,840 Expanding the details really look at I'm using a lot of complex sentences. 29 00:02:46,170 --> 00:02:54,240 I'm using correlative conjunctions like not only, but also I'm using a concluding sentence here. 30 00:02:55,490 --> 00:03:02,180 Sometimes I'm combining the detail and the explanation of the detail into one sentence, which is what 31 00:03:02,180 --> 00:03:03,410 you see right here. 32 00:03:04,340 --> 00:03:06,440 Numerous academic articles support this. 33 00:03:06,440 --> 00:03:11,680 Simply verbally stating a difficulty embodies the first step to locating a solution. 34 00:03:11,690 --> 00:03:18,110 For example, an experienced friend can listen to their mates issue with marriage and simply through 35 00:03:18,110 --> 00:03:22,250 this action, offer a solution based on their past similar situation. 36 00:03:24,890 --> 00:03:26,170 Be that as it may. 37 00:03:26,180 --> 00:03:27,050 Concluding. 38 00:03:27,050 --> 00:03:28,670 I mean, that's connecting. 39 00:03:28,790 --> 00:03:32,000 Connecting or launching off from the previous point. 40 00:03:32,210 --> 00:03:36,830 Be that as it may, we are ignorant of of what is right or wrong. 41 00:03:36,830 --> 00:03:44,390 And at these times, a person listening to our potential solutions could help us avoid a horrible outcome 42 00:03:44,390 --> 00:03:52,070 that we cannot see which added the word us they help us avoid because they help avoid or because they 43 00:03:52,070 --> 00:03:52,690 help us avoid. 44 00:03:52,700 --> 00:03:54,050 Both are correct, actually. 45 00:03:54,680 --> 00:04:02,900 But again, try to look and learn from from these examples that I'm giving you. 46 00:04:02,930 --> 00:04:04,490 Here's the full essay. 47 00:04:04,820 --> 00:04:08,390 You can stop it and look through it more carefully. 48 00:04:08,990 --> 00:04:15,980 What you should be doing is really looking at the different ways in which I'm starting sentences, the 49 00:04:15,980 --> 00:04:18,800 phrases that I'm using to start sentences. 50 00:04:19,970 --> 00:04:23,690 You know, when you look at my introduction, you see language like with that in mind. 51 00:04:24,290 --> 00:04:26,120 You see a lot of complex sentences. 52 00:04:26,120 --> 00:04:30,410 You see a lot of language that are really impressive. 53 00:04:30,590 --> 00:04:31,670 And examiners. 54 00:04:35,680 --> 00:04:36,640 Right here. 55 00:04:36,640 --> 00:04:42,370 Here, I'm going to give you just a series of the complete essays. 56 00:04:43,210 --> 00:04:43,540 Right. 57 00:04:43,600 --> 00:04:46,140 And again, take your time and read through them. 58 00:04:46,150 --> 00:04:50,210 Now, for this one, you should really take your time because you can look. 59 00:04:50,230 --> 00:04:55,360 This is where I'm doing a complete agreement on the face to face communication question. 60 00:04:55,810 --> 00:05:04,180 And then on the next screen, I'm doing a a partial agreement, a full essay for the partial agreement. 61 00:05:04,870 --> 00:05:11,380 And so you can really look at the differences between how you write the partial agreement essay and 62 00:05:11,380 --> 00:05:13,510 the complete agreement agreement essay. 63 00:05:13,930 --> 00:05:19,990 The partial agreement essay, in my opinion, is much more difficult, much more difficult to write. 64 00:05:19,990 --> 00:05:22,540 But a lot of students, they keep trying it. 65 00:05:22,840 --> 00:05:24,130 They keep trying it. 66 00:05:24,880 --> 00:05:29,110 This is the one about bringing your family overseas again. 67 00:05:29,110 --> 00:05:35,710 Now for here, you can see I have the topics I'm looking at, the second body paragraph, the topic 68 00:05:35,710 --> 00:05:41,620 sentence, and then I mentioned detail, one in detail, number two in the same. 69 00:05:41,620 --> 00:05:44,350 And the second sentence together you can do it this way. 70 00:05:44,380 --> 00:05:47,170 And doing it this way actually saves time. 71 00:05:48,010 --> 00:05:51,880 And then I explain detail number one and explain detail number two. 72 00:05:52,840 --> 00:05:57,790 And in the first body paragraph, I do the exact same thing, topic sentence. 73 00:05:57,970 --> 00:06:02,770 I put detail one in detail to combine together in the second sentence. 74 00:06:03,070 --> 00:06:05,710 Then I explain detail one explain detail. 75 00:06:05,710 --> 00:06:13,720 Two, Doing it this way, writing it this way that I've just talked about is a great way to make your 76 00:06:13,720 --> 00:06:15,490 writing more concise. 77 00:06:17,100 --> 00:06:19,770 It's a great way to make your writing more concise. 78 00:06:20,520 --> 00:06:28,590 I like doing that because and the reason why I chose to write in that manner for this particular essay 79 00:06:28,590 --> 00:06:36,810 question was because here I did a third body paragraph, a third body paragraph to explain my opinion. 80 00:06:38,070 --> 00:06:44,580 And you can see I only have 290 words, I only have 290 words. 81 00:06:45,840 --> 00:06:49,110 It looks like a lot, but it's only 290 words. 82 00:06:50,100 --> 00:06:56,670 But I'm able to say a lot because I don't use a lot of function words. 83 00:06:56,670 --> 00:07:02,610 I don't use a lot of everything that I try to write is a content word. 84 00:07:02,790 --> 00:07:08,520 I try to make sure all of the words that I'm using are necessary for me to use. 85 00:07:12,730 --> 00:07:19,930 And here is a full essay for the scientific research should be the responsibility of governments or 86 00:07:19,930 --> 00:07:22,210 commercial organizations. 87 00:07:22,810 --> 00:07:24,880 And again, we have a full essay. 88 00:07:25,420 --> 00:07:27,900 This one is 294 words. 89 00:07:27,910 --> 00:07:32,710 As I told you, every single one is going to be under 300. 90 00:07:33,700 --> 00:07:41,650 I think if you if you if you put that if you really limit yourself at that mark, you can really train 91 00:07:41,680 --> 00:07:45,370 train yourself to write in a concise manner. 92 00:07:46,060 --> 00:07:52,690 I'm going to of course, after this year, you'll see some lectures that talk about cohesion, coherence 93 00:07:52,690 --> 00:07:54,100 and concise writing. 94 00:07:54,100 --> 00:07:59,180 And you might be able to get a little bit more advice from those lectures. 95 00:07:59,200 --> 00:08:03,880 They can help you pursue that style that examiners like a lot. 96 00:08:05,000 --> 00:08:05,380 Right. 97 00:08:05,380 --> 00:08:10,840 So as I just said, coming up next, we're going to talk about better sentence structure, advice, 98 00:08:10,840 --> 00:08:18,730 concise writing, coherence, really improving your ability to write great sentences. 99 00:08:19,600 --> 00:08:23,470 Included in that will be some tips and suggestions for better style. 100 00:08:24,430 --> 00:08:29,800 If you want to write in a way that they're going to really want to give you a high score. 101 00:08:31,360 --> 00:08:37,750 Thank you so much for learning how to write the standard academic essay with me. 102 00:08:38,110 --> 00:08:43,690 I hope that has been very helpful and that you've been able to take in a lot of advice. 103 00:08:43,960 --> 00:08:52,960 Now it's time for you to go out there on your own and really work at writing a better academic essay. 104 00:08:53,110 --> 00:08:54,100 Thanks a lot. 105 00:08:54,130 --> 00:08:55,120 Take care. 106 00:08:55,150 --> 00:08:57,400 Have a fantastic day.