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So here's the first one we see.

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The introduction is already there and the introduction that we wrote previously, and I'm going to go

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ahead and write the two body paragraphs.

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Some people feel that boarding schools are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree

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for many reasons.

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Consider both sides of this debate and conclude right.

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There's no opinion necessary.

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So now I'm going to go ahead and write the first body paragraph.

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Och.

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And there we have the first body paragraph.

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Clearly I'm having a problem with the word language today.

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Le n g u a g e.

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But I'm pointing that out because it's really important for you throughout your, throughout your writing,

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you should really have a strong understanding of words that you have trouble with.

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Like for me, even though I've written thousands of essays, I know that the word form and from I often

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mix up on a keyboard, so I have to be aware of it.

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The word language with the with the U and the for some reason I consistently will mix those up.

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And so there are certain words when I use them that I know I have to always double check myself to make

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sure that I'm writing that word correctly.

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So you should do the same thing.

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You should build yourself a database because none of us are perfect and most likely we are making some

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of the similar mistakes over and over again.

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And we can avoid them by just being mindful that we're.

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You're typing a word that has given you trouble in the past.

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So now I'm going to go ahead and write the second body paragraph.

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But you can see here that we have all of the sentences.

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We have the topic sentence, detail, number one, then we move forward with explaining it to further

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explain.

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Then we have detail number two and then we have the final sentence which is explaining it.

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This is because so that's the that's the standard way of writing a body paragraph.

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Now what's going to help your scores to have perfect grammar and perfect vocabulary along with your

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showing off your linguistic range?

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So let's go ahead and move on with the next body paragraph.

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Okay.

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And there we have the second body paragraph.

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Now, you saw me with this one.

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Go ahead and I and rewrite the topic sentence.

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And the reason why I did that was I just saw it and I said, well, you know, there's a more direct

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way for me to express this to you so that you really just can see how to do a great topic sentence.

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Despite the above arguments, some could oppose boarding schools based on the drawbacks.

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That's it.

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That's a that's a that's a better that's a better way of wording, a topic sentence.

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Right.

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And then we went through the detail, number one, the example to explain it and connect it together.

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And then we went into detail number two, where we put in the explanation also for detail.

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Number two now for detail.

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Number two is talking about the children living under constant observation and the problem that results

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from that.

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All right.

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So now I'm going to go ahead and move forward and write the conclusion.

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Right.

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And there we have a very straight forward conclusion, two sentences, two sentences here.

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And so when you're writing when you're writing out a full paragraph is no more than that, is no more

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than that.

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Now, in this next example, we're going to shift back and go back into our full screen mode.

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And there you can see the entire essay right there in this next one.

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What you see before you here are just is the two body paragraphs are the two body paragraphs.

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Right.

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And here I've gone ahead and identified in blue the topic sentence, then detail number one, explaining

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detail number one.

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Detail number two, extending and explaining.

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Detail number two and then repeating that exact same process.

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Topic sentence detail one.

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Explain detail one.

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In this final sentence, we have detail number two and the explanation of detail number two combined

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within one sentence.

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So you can go ahead and pause the lecture right here to read through these two body paragraphs.

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But really, what I want you to pay attention to is all of the different structure, all all of the

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different sentences that you have to write for a body paragraph that scores very, very well.

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Topic sentence detail one explain detail one detail to explain detail to.

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And of course, what makes the difference is the quality of your writing, the quality of your writing.

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Now, of course, when you're writing your body paragraphs, you don't put in the TS and the D one and

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the D two.

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I'm doing that just to help you identify what each sentence is.

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Here is that same question about the population problems and solutions with the introduction and the

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conclusion.

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And again, if you want to, you can stop it and read through it line by line.

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If you have any questions about it, please be sure to ask me.

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Here we have another example where we have the topic sentence, the detail number one, and then expanding

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it and expanding it some more.

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And then we're moving down to detail number two and explaining detail.

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Number two, topic sentence detail.

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One, explain detail.

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Number one, detail to explain detail.

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Number two, I know this sounds repetitive, but the reason why I'm doing it, I'm doing it like that

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in such a mechanical voice is because I want you to see it's a pattern.

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It's a is a pattern that you have to follow.

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So if you're going to produce a body paragraph to me that has two sentences, I'm going to ask you,

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did did you did you watch the video?

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Did you look at the lecture?

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Because there are no two sentence paragraphs.

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That's not going to be enough development for you to get a really great score.

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And then here is that same question about the tobacco in the full essay format.

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Again, take your time and you can read through the entire essay.

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All right.

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So thank you very much.

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That will conclude part number one for doing the body paragraphs.

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In the next section.

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We're just going to look at a couple of more body paragraphs and then also some full, full essays that

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have already been written.

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So thank you very much and I'll talk to you soon.