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Now let's go ahead and move forward into part number two of the introduction examples.

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In this first one, we're going to be writing in a live format so that you can see the sentence structure

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we're dealing with.

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The question of scientific research should be the responsibility of governments rather than commercial

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organizations.

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Do you agree or disagree?

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Clearly, from the outline there on the right hand side, you can see that I agree that governments

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should be responsible.

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My controlling ideas are lack of bias and the government owing a public duty.

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So now let's go ahead and see how this introduction is.

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All right.

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And there we have an introduction.

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Now, one thing I want you to notice with the introduction again, when you see me writing, you will

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very rarely see any weak verbs in the writing.

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I think that when you're using words like is ah was were have has having that.

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You create.

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A weaker argument because your language is imprecise.

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Actually is to those is to exact in fact words like is ah was were is very it's just not good language

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for high level academic writing is frowned upon because when you're a basic level English student,

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that's the kind of language that you use.

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When you move into being more of an advanced level English student, you should be able to throw out

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those words and use more descriptive verbs or exact more, more precise verbs to describe exactly how

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you feel or the point you're trying to make.

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So now let's go ahead and go back to full screen mode.

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All right.

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And in our next one, this is the question that's dealing with face to face communication.

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And you can see the introduction here.

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Communication conveyed through verbal and written forms often ranks as a cornerstone of human civilization.

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A recent controversy revolves around the question of the most impactful communication.

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Commentators, interestingly, dispute whether face to face or written discourse should hold this position

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as expressed below.

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The strength of one on one dialogue surpasses tech centered output because it builds trust and relationships.

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Now here, what I want to point out to you is that we're using a simple sentence, a compound sentence

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and a complex sentence.

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Also no weak verbs conveyed revolves.

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Dispute.

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Right?

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No.

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Weak verbs surpass where we're really using great language that's going to really help out our score.

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Introduction.

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Number eight, again, look at it very carefully.

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This is the this is the second version of it, right?

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Same introduction.

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I'm not going to read it again.

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But this is the this is the same introduction language.

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But the thesis statement is changed because we're dealing with a partial agreement situation.

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If it were written, if, you know, we were going to write it with a partial agreement standpoint.

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Again, no weak verbs, no IG verbs present at all.

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We have our compound and complex sentences here.

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Really?

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This is the way you want to write to score very, very high on the grading scale.

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Question number nine.

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This is the one that's advantages and disadvantages, where the person is going overseas for work or

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study and they're going to bring along.

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They're deciding whether to bring their family and they're talking about the advantages and disadvantages

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of that situation.

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So in terms of the introduction, we're starting off general specific and thesis statement.

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When moving to a new country, an individual must consider family impact.

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Choosing to travel with family contains potential benefits and drawbacks.

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This essay argues that bringing family includes more positives, such as eliminating homesickness and

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providing opportunities.

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But some negatives exist, such as expense and distraction.

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Now, this question has a part to it that you can't see here, but has a part where it's asking you

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to give your opinion.

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That's a necessary element.

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You don't see the language there, but that is that is part of this question.

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It's just not written there for space purposes.

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But this question is asking you to give the opinion.

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That's why you see in the thesis statement that I am giving the opinion.

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Now here I want you to really notice the the higher level sentence the higher level sentence structures

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that we're showing the examiner.

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First sentence is a complex sentence.

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Second sentence is starting with a jarring.

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Third sentence is a compound sentence.

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You want to from the very start.

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Show the examiner the level of your work, the quality of your work.

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Set the tone early.

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Now moving on to question number ten or introduction number ten.

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This is the one dealing with losing the natural resources and having to choose one resource and explain

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why it should be saved.

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I chose trees as my resource because of the environmental benefits, with the details of cleaning air

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and preventing water runoff and the human benefits of saving energy and also getting medicines.

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So here we're dealing with an uncommon phrase with this restriction in mind.

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We have a compound sentence present and no B verbs.

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According to news media outlets, global resources shrink by a noticeable factor each year.

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Noticeable factor?

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That's the collocation there, which detrimentally affects collocation.

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Humanity and impossible task would exist if cultures and governments decided to save all natural raw

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materials collocation and thus some propose focusing on one resource above all others.

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With this restriction in mind connecting language.

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The tree shall receive the highest guardianship due to environmental and human benefits.

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Right.

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So when you talk about moving your score up to scale, you have to do these.

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You have to really include this level of writing, you know, as close, as close to it as you can get

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to really move your writing up the scale.

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Okay.

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And coming up next, we're going to write the topic sentences.

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And then finally, we're going to move into writing the body paragraphs and the conclusion, the body

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paragraphs and the conclusion.

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All right.

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Thank you very much for joining me today and have a fantastic day.