1 00:00:00,210 --> 00:00:00,720 All right. 2 00:00:00,720 --> 00:00:06,210 Coming up next, we are going to start writing the discussion points. 3 00:00:06,630 --> 00:00:09,300 We're going to start writing the discussion points. 4 00:00:10,530 --> 00:00:17,220 Now, when you're writing the discussion points to make it, I guess to make it easier, for me, it 5 00:00:17,220 --> 00:00:20,250 would be it would be good if you were able to. 6 00:00:20,280 --> 00:00:22,740 Well, I guess you can use your own outline. 7 00:00:22,920 --> 00:00:26,580 The problem is that I can't see your outline to make sure you're doing it correctly. 8 00:00:27,300 --> 00:00:30,570 But you can use my outline or you can use your outline. 9 00:00:30,660 --> 00:00:34,400 But again, I'm not looking at your outline, so it might maybe make it more challenging for me, but 10 00:00:34,410 --> 00:00:35,190 it's fine. 11 00:00:35,220 --> 00:00:38,580 You can use my outline or your outline to write the discussion points. 12 00:00:49,710 --> 00:00:52,920 So what must you do to write a discussion point? 13 00:00:52,950 --> 00:00:55,080 We're going to work on time to writing. 14 00:00:57,530 --> 00:01:01,310 When you're writing discussion points, this is what you want to think about. 15 00:01:02,240 --> 00:01:05,330 It's really helpful to work from your outline. 16 00:01:05,840 --> 00:01:08,150 Use your outline, right. 17 00:01:08,150 --> 00:01:08,690 You don't want to. 18 00:01:08,720 --> 00:01:09,380 You don't want to. 19 00:01:09,470 --> 00:01:10,070 Don't want to. 20 00:01:10,070 --> 00:01:13,220 Have to think about what to say. 21 00:01:14,380 --> 00:01:16,060 That's why you have an outline there. 22 00:01:16,540 --> 00:01:18,550 Make sure you stay on point. 23 00:01:19,910 --> 00:01:24,860 Whatever that discussion point is about, stay on point. 24 00:01:25,400 --> 00:01:28,550 Do not go outside of the discussion point. 25 00:01:29,540 --> 00:01:36,350 And then you want to make sure that everything that you're talking about is is coherent and when possible, 26 00:01:36,800 --> 00:01:38,120 when possible. 27 00:01:38,330 --> 00:01:42,200 You want to be able to make sure your paragraphs are coherent with each other. 28 00:01:43,970 --> 00:01:46,160 Your ideas should really connect together. 29 00:01:47,030 --> 00:01:48,800 Show your writing ability. 30 00:01:48,800 --> 00:01:50,660 That's how you raise your score. 31 00:01:50,870 --> 00:01:51,920 Keep that in mind. 32 00:01:52,460 --> 00:01:59,510 Something can be done perfectly correct, but b only worth a six because of the English ability that 33 00:01:59,510 --> 00:02:00,230 is shown. 34 00:02:02,780 --> 00:02:03,020 All right. 35 00:02:03,020 --> 00:02:07,700 So we're going to move on and write the body paragraph. 36 00:02:08,760 --> 00:02:09,150 All right. 37 00:02:09,150 --> 00:02:11,610 One of the discussion point paragraphs, I should say. 38 00:02:13,610 --> 00:02:13,800 Right. 39 00:02:13,840 --> 00:02:15,280 So we're going to. 40 00:02:15,280 --> 00:02:15,880 Right. 41 00:02:15,880 --> 00:02:21,250 You're going to have 4 minutes, 4 minutes to write, one discussion point paragraph. 42 00:02:21,640 --> 00:02:26,410 There are three discussion point paragraphs are really if you're timing yourself when you're practicing 43 00:02:26,410 --> 00:02:31,300 by yourself, you should be able to write three discussion point paragraphs in 12 minutes. 44 00:02:32,380 --> 00:02:34,810 Right now we're going to write the first discussion point. 45 00:02:34,810 --> 00:02:39,460 You have 4 minutes and you're you're going to type it directly into the chat box. 46 00:02:39,460 --> 00:02:48,910 Like I said, you can use my outline on the left or you can use your outline either one you have you 47 00:02:48,910 --> 00:02:52,840 have 4 minutes to write discussion point number one. 48 00:07:11,160 --> 00:07:11,820 Okay. 49 00:07:12,450 --> 00:07:15,480 I'm going to go ahead and look at some of the examples. 50 00:07:16,020 --> 00:07:17,280 Please give me one moment. 51 00:07:17,280 --> 00:07:21,180 We're going to pause for a moment while I look at different examples. 52 00:07:21,180 --> 00:07:28,860 And keep in mind, when I'm pulling out examples, I'm pulling out examples that have information that 53 00:07:28,860 --> 00:07:30,210 I need to teach. 54 00:07:30,780 --> 00:07:33,090 So that's that's what I'm going that's what I'm doing. 55 00:07:41,570 --> 00:07:42,140 Okay. 56 00:07:42,140 --> 00:07:45,320 So let's look at some of these examples very quickly. 57 00:07:45,500 --> 00:07:47,030 The first discussion point. 58 00:07:49,740 --> 00:07:50,130 All right. 59 00:07:50,130 --> 00:07:57,350 So these first ones that I'm showing you, there are problems right there. 60 00:07:57,360 --> 00:07:58,380 Problems. 61 00:07:59,040 --> 00:08:05,580 And with a lot of these there were these first ones on this first screen they were looking at and examiners 62 00:08:05,580 --> 00:08:07,530 going to to look at it. 63 00:08:08,470 --> 00:08:12,670 And they're going to have problems with what's being done. 64 00:08:13,390 --> 00:08:13,750 Does it? 65 00:08:13,780 --> 00:08:15,550 What's the problem with this first one? 66 00:08:17,910 --> 00:08:20,700 It's an incoherent paragraph. 67 00:08:23,880 --> 00:08:25,440 What's the problem with the first one? 68 00:08:26,010 --> 00:08:33,570 Anybody on the back vendors is conveniently located near the shopping center and has ample parking space 69 00:08:33,570 --> 00:08:35,580 with added feature of valet parking. 70 00:08:35,760 --> 00:08:39,670 It is a Chinese restaurant having buffet meals a la carte. 71 00:08:39,690 --> 00:08:41,790 It plays live music on the weekends. 72 00:08:42,480 --> 00:08:43,440 What's the problem? 73 00:08:48,700 --> 00:08:50,110 Describing the meal. 74 00:08:51,130 --> 00:08:51,730 Right. 75 00:08:52,300 --> 00:08:59,770 Describing the meal again, the eating hub not only provides amazing food, but is well equipped with 76 00:08:59,770 --> 00:09:01,840 live stage shows on Friday and Saturday night. 77 00:09:02,520 --> 00:09:11,740 If I'm an examiner looking at that, this is when this is when the examiner reaches over, grabs a bottle 78 00:09:11,740 --> 00:09:17,680 of wine, drinks a glass of wine, because this student is about to give them a headache. 79 00:09:20,550 --> 00:09:24,810 This first sentence has nothing to do with the discussion point. 80 00:09:27,060 --> 00:09:27,650 Right. 81 00:09:27,660 --> 00:09:30,210 It has nothing to do with the discussion point. 82 00:09:32,530 --> 00:09:33,660 The second one. 83 00:09:33,670 --> 00:09:39,970 The second sentence generally talks about it, but this first discussion point doesn't mean anything. 84 00:09:42,820 --> 00:09:44,020 Same thing here. 85 00:09:45,330 --> 00:09:47,460 Since the restaurant is very famous for its taste. 86 00:09:47,460 --> 00:09:51,420 I also find it unique in terms of the service I was provided during. 87 00:09:54,480 --> 00:09:57,270 Yeah, I mean, you guys, you can't write this way. 88 00:09:57,270 --> 00:09:59,400 This has nothing to do with the discussion point. 89 00:10:02,090 --> 00:10:02,390 Right. 90 00:10:02,390 --> 00:10:08,900 You cannot you cannot give the examiner a headache by by talking about something incoherent. 91 00:10:14,590 --> 00:10:16,870 Again, this person is messing up in the fourth one. 92 00:10:16,870 --> 00:10:18,580 They're messing up the coherence. 93 00:10:18,850 --> 00:10:24,670 Talking about where you could find a massive pantry to provide mesmerizing food that has nothing to 94 00:10:24,670 --> 00:10:26,290 do with where it's located. 95 00:10:31,440 --> 00:10:33,150 This this last one. 96 00:10:33,920 --> 00:10:38,240 This last one tells me nothing about, as he tells me, not specific. 97 00:10:38,330 --> 00:10:43,910 But when you read the first sentence, if I came up to you and I said, I came across this fascinating 98 00:10:43,910 --> 00:10:49,490 experience while traveling across the countryside for an urging urge of holidaying. 99 00:10:50,180 --> 00:10:50,410 Okay. 100 00:10:50,420 --> 00:10:53,870 I think what you're trying to talk about is when you say this fascinating experience you're trying to 101 00:10:53,870 --> 00:10:57,170 talk about at the restaurant, but that's not clear. 102 00:10:59,650 --> 00:11:01,780 This last sentence is incoherent. 103 00:11:03,500 --> 00:11:05,330 It has nothing to do with the location. 104 00:11:06,620 --> 00:11:07,160 Right. 105 00:11:07,940 --> 00:11:16,250 I hope that I hope that you all are getting a more clear idea of what our mistakes that happen inside 106 00:11:16,250 --> 00:11:17,450 of introductions. 107 00:11:26,330 --> 00:11:32,900 Again with this first one, the person should have done the first two sentences and stopped. 108 00:11:34,830 --> 00:11:40,050 Why are you writing this last sentence about the type of food that they have? 109 00:11:41,630 --> 00:11:48,530 Did they ask you to to talk about in this first discussion point the kind of food that you were eating? 110 00:11:49,380 --> 00:11:51,510 Stop messing up your score. 111 00:11:56,860 --> 00:11:57,940 I like this one. 112 00:11:58,870 --> 00:12:06,310 Thank God whoever did this one is is really is giving me headache relief. 113 00:12:07,570 --> 00:12:11,560 The restaurant is located near the shopping mall next to the lake location. 114 00:12:12,100 --> 00:12:17,890 The location is mesmerizing and attached to the nature that second sentence you don't really need. 115 00:12:19,020 --> 00:12:19,540 It's not. 116 00:12:19,540 --> 00:12:22,090 It's not I mean, it's okay. 117 00:12:23,350 --> 00:12:27,820 Even though it's located in the heart of the city, the restaurant is situated in an enclosed place 118 00:12:27,820 --> 00:12:28,900 with less pollution. 119 00:12:29,470 --> 00:12:30,240 Okay, that's. 120 00:12:30,250 --> 00:12:31,480 That's actually okay. 121 00:12:33,010 --> 00:12:38,500 The restaurant was placed in the middle of an urban area near the multicultural center since it was 122 00:12:38,500 --> 00:12:39,230 in the middle of the city. 123 00:12:39,250 --> 00:12:41,900 You can easily reach the restaurant by using any transportation. 124 00:12:41,920 --> 00:12:43,660 Good job on this one. 125 00:12:46,850 --> 00:12:47,920 I like this one. 126 00:12:47,930 --> 00:12:54,270 The restaurant is hidden in a small street in downtown, not far from my location that I have never. 127 00:12:54,290 --> 00:12:55,400 I don't know what this means. 128 00:12:55,400 --> 00:12:58,550 This is a location mistake that I have never notified it. 129 00:12:58,550 --> 00:12:59,810 I don't know what that means. 130 00:13:00,740 --> 00:13:01,700 It's particular. 131 00:13:01,700 --> 00:13:08,450 Its particularity is the multicultural center where we find different kind of ambience in the meal around 132 00:13:08,450 --> 00:13:09,110 the world. 133 00:13:09,170 --> 00:13:09,700 Yeah, okay. 134 00:13:09,710 --> 00:13:13,070 That's that's pretty good in terms of in terms of where it's located. 135 00:13:17,180 --> 00:13:19,790 But that part, this part. 136 00:13:19,790 --> 00:13:21,080 Let me go back for a second. 137 00:13:21,350 --> 00:13:24,650 This part about ambience of meals around the world. 138 00:13:24,950 --> 00:13:27,410 I would not be talking about this right now. 139 00:13:28,400 --> 00:13:32,240 I would talk about I would talk about ambience of meals around the world. 140 00:13:32,390 --> 00:13:35,960 When I was talking about why am I why am I recommending this place? 141 00:13:37,220 --> 00:13:37,790 Right. 142 00:13:38,600 --> 00:13:41,360 I wouldn't talk about that in that right there. 143 00:13:44,000 --> 00:13:48,500 The restaurant we have visited is situated near the shopping mall in the center of the city. 144 00:13:49,140 --> 00:13:53,060 It is not so far from my residence, probably ten kilometers ahead towards the north. 145 00:13:53,870 --> 00:13:54,440 All right. 146 00:13:54,470 --> 00:13:56,360 That's a really good sentence. 147 00:13:56,390 --> 00:13:57,830 I like that sentence. 148 00:13:58,160 --> 00:14:04,460 The only thing I would say is add in one more sentence here. 149 00:14:05,600 --> 00:14:07,700 Add in one more sentence here. 150 00:14:10,000 --> 00:14:10,270 Right. 151 00:14:10,360 --> 00:14:10,720 What you. 152 00:14:10,750 --> 00:14:14,090 What you should have done was go even more. 153 00:14:14,110 --> 00:14:16,240 Go even more specific. 154 00:14:17,070 --> 00:14:19,830 So you would add in one more sentence that says. 155 00:14:20,620 --> 00:14:27,220 When you go inside the Amex shopping mall, turn right and you'll see an elevator, take the elevator 156 00:14:27,220 --> 00:14:33,130 up to the third floor and then head straight down where you will see the restaurant directly in front 157 00:14:33,130 --> 00:14:33,610 of you. 158 00:14:35,530 --> 00:14:38,170 You see how I went from general to specific? 159 00:14:41,520 --> 00:14:48,060 The restaurant I'm recommending today is located in downtown Lahore and in the center of the food street 160 00:14:48,600 --> 00:14:52,320 location of the restaurant and navigate since it's in the center of the city. 161 00:14:52,320 --> 00:14:56,550 But when we'll experience heavy traffic in the evening, the restaurant is surrounded by cultural and 162 00:14:56,550 --> 00:14:59,310 historical buildings and you can have a direct view of these sites. 163 00:14:59,560 --> 00:15:00,240 Our good locate. 164 00:15:00,240 --> 00:15:00,780 Good. 165 00:15:02,260 --> 00:15:03,850 It is located on the rooftop. 166 00:15:04,990 --> 00:15:06,520 This one is really good. 167 00:15:06,820 --> 00:15:07,960 I like this one a lot. 168 00:15:08,950 --> 00:15:11,020 This last one is probably my favorite one. 169 00:15:12,490 --> 00:15:15,670 Because they have some grammar mistakes. 170 00:15:16,600 --> 00:15:24,040 But you can look at it and you can see that everything the person is talking about is dealing with location. 171 00:15:26,030 --> 00:15:29,960 Right there directly inside the box of the discussion point. 172 00:15:38,480 --> 00:15:42,110 Uh, Roy, I've got a couple of questions where I was asking me about. 173 00:15:42,470 --> 00:15:44,600 What do you mean by multicultural? 174 00:15:45,200 --> 00:15:46,650 A multicultural center is. 175 00:15:46,650 --> 00:15:47,780 It's just a building. 176 00:15:48,080 --> 00:15:54,020 It's a building where you have different you might have different cultural activities, different types 177 00:15:54,020 --> 00:15:56,870 of restaurants, different types of stores, different types of shops. 178 00:15:57,770 --> 00:16:02,150 You'll see that more in a country like the United States is a very multicultural country. 179 00:16:02,360 --> 00:16:05,860 Or in in the UK where you see where you have much more. 180 00:16:05,870 --> 00:16:09,200 We have a very multicultural area. 181 00:16:09,440 --> 00:16:10,700 But that's all it is. 182 00:16:18,880 --> 00:16:19,690 Any other. 183 00:16:19,840 --> 00:16:20,100 Yeah. 184 00:16:20,140 --> 00:16:31,510 So I hope that, you know, you can see you can see here that the difference between writing a discussion 185 00:16:31,510 --> 00:16:33,940 point paragraph that is talking. 186 00:16:34,900 --> 00:16:41,530 That is discussing the discussion point and not going outside of the discussion point. 187 00:17:00,250 --> 00:17:00,970 All right, here. 188 00:17:00,970 --> 00:17:03,730 Here you can look at my example. 189 00:17:06,910 --> 00:17:07,150 Right. 190 00:17:07,150 --> 00:17:08,470 Here's my example. 191 00:17:12,150 --> 00:17:19,100 What really matters more than almost any aspect is a restaurant, location and RWA. 192 00:17:19,290 --> 00:17:22,170 African eateries stands superior. 193 00:17:22,950 --> 00:17:30,450 Although Detroit maintains several hotspots around the city, AWB operates downtown in the Lower East 194 00:17:30,450 --> 00:17:32,640 Side, just beyond Central Avenue. 195 00:17:33,300 --> 00:17:39,600 More specifically, Detroit residents can locate the restaurant in the multicultural center, standing 196 00:17:39,600 --> 00:17:41,550 on the intersections north corner. 197 00:17:44,180 --> 00:17:51,740 When you write about the location, a person should be able to visualize like a person that's from that 198 00:17:51,740 --> 00:17:57,500 city should be able to visualize exactly where this place is. 199 00:17:59,730 --> 00:18:01,680 Exactly where this place is. 200 00:18:01,860 --> 00:18:04,020 Now, one thing I'm showing you. 201 00:18:04,820 --> 00:18:13,310 In this paragraph is also I'm showing you what really seven level 7 to 9 writing looks like. 202 00:18:14,510 --> 00:18:16,990 My first sentence is called a cleft sentence. 203 00:18:17,000 --> 00:18:19,640 Cleft is a type of grammatical sentence. 204 00:18:20,640 --> 00:18:23,460 My next sentence is a complex sentence. 205 00:18:25,050 --> 00:18:25,510 Right. 206 00:18:25,530 --> 00:18:32,730 And then I'm showing you how we go from a general statement to a specific statement to be to being more 207 00:18:32,730 --> 00:18:33,540 specific. 208 00:18:34,410 --> 00:18:39,350 Also, you can see that there is a limitation. 209 00:18:39,380 --> 00:18:41,850 This this is the difference with verbs. 210 00:18:43,240 --> 00:18:46,630 Like Level six writing would have. 211 00:18:46,630 --> 00:18:49,060 The word is will have. 212 00:18:49,060 --> 00:18:51,130 The word has would have. 213 00:18:51,130 --> 00:18:52,450 The word is. 214 00:18:53,670 --> 00:18:58,620 High level scores use specific verbs. 215 00:19:00,070 --> 00:19:02,230 Right away is not. 216 00:19:02,230 --> 00:19:03,490 Is superior. 217 00:19:03,490 --> 00:19:04,780 Stands superior. 218 00:19:05,500 --> 00:19:08,360 Not Detroit has several hotspots. 219 00:19:08,380 --> 00:19:11,140 Detroit maintains several hotspots. 220 00:19:11,620 --> 00:19:12,850 Not Detroit. 221 00:19:13,210 --> 00:19:15,430 AWP is downtown. 222 00:19:15,460 --> 00:19:17,710 AWP operates downtown. 223 00:19:19,020 --> 00:19:19,260 Right. 224 00:19:19,380 --> 00:19:20,670 That's the level. 225 00:19:21,650 --> 00:19:26,540 That's the difference when people ask me this kind of stuff and they want to know Why am I not getting 226 00:19:26,540 --> 00:19:29,270 an eight or Why am I not getting a nine? 227 00:19:29,630 --> 00:19:31,640 It's because you use all those weak verbs.