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‫So in today's muddled writing lesson, we'll look at a common question type and it's actually a mixed

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‫question type, multiple charts.

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‫So we've had a look at a few examples of these previously.

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‫And it's basically where you might see a few different pieces of visual information, mixed bar chart

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‫line graphs, even tables.

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‫Any of these things can be mixed together.

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‫Don't get worried if you have that.

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‫In fact, I actually quite like these question types because it often means you get good chances to

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‫compare or at times it can make the grouping a little bit easier, especially if you have two types

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‫of charts.

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‫OK, so let's take a look at our question.

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‫The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending evening courses in different topics.

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‫The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course.

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‫Participants summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons

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‫where relevant.

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‫OK, so even before I've seen the visual information, I know that first sentence.

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‫We've got a bar chart, men and women in evening courses, different topics.

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‫We also will have a pie chart, I assume one because we're not plural charts a pie chart, which is

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‫information about the ages of these corvids, participants, the people who are enrolling in these night

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‫courses.

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‫So we're going to learn a few pieces of information.

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‫All right.

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‫Let's take a look at this.

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‫So let's begin on the left.

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‫So in the left, we have our bar chart at the top, men in blue, women in green.

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‫Let's look at the y axis.

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‫We have number of people from zero to 40.

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‫And along the X axis, we have four different courses.

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‫We have drama, painting, sculpture and language.

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‫The first thing I can see is the language has what seems to be a pretty high number of enrollment's

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‫sculpture.

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‫Not so much painting seems quite popular drama.

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‫So, so, OK.

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‫So that's pretty much the bar chart.

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‫Let's take a look at the pie chart.

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‫So we have first thing I see is in red, 42 percent, a 50 and over.

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‫This could maybe be things I describe in my overview.

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‫And then we have ages from 20 to 50.

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‫So two pieces of visual information here in a bar chart and a pie chart.

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‫I'm beginning to think about grouping.

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‫I'm beginning to analyze the data a bit so that I sort of them sort of understanding what I'm seeing.

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‫What's the big picture?

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‫What sort of things can I specifically describe?

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‫So let's go on to our plan now.

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‫So you are thinking around our plan, there are a few things that I could probably do in terms of grouping,

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‫but the first thing that really comes to mind and often the first, most obvious, most simple is the

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‫best grouping is quite simply to have group one as bar chart and group two as pie chart.

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‫The semicolons aren't that important.

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‫I just like include in them.

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‫So we have here our bar chart, which I will describe in detail.

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‫Paragraph one and I'll describe this, the pie chart in detail.

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‫Paragraph two, there's still a lot of information that I can compare and describe between them.

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‫So I think having them separate doesn't matter too much and I think it's going to be easier for the

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‫examiner to understand and read OK and overview.

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‫So I often say two things to say for the overview occasionally.

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‫Just one sort of big picture sentence is OK.

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‫But it makes sense really to sort of give two sentences for this.

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‫My first sentence, I'll say something about the bar chart and my second sentence are say something

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‫about the pie chart.

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‫Now, let's take a quick look.

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‫Is there anything I can say regarding more women than men?

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‫And let's see, so women have three out of the four courses.

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‫There are more women enrolled.

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‫I could say generally more women in role than men.

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‫That would be OK to say for this.

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‫Is there anything else I can say?

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‫So here we have painting 25, 30, that's 55.

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‫Here we have 20 and 40, 60 people.

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‫So I could say language is the most popular and I've just obviously added these figures together and

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‫worked this out.

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‫That would also be pretty good to say.

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‫But I'm going to say women more than men in terms of how many are enrolled in or the most popular.

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‫So it's more popular.

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‫There's more women in most classes than there are men.

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‫And for the pie chart, I will simply say aged 50 plus popular.

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‫So we can see here, if you're 50 or over, that accounts for 42 percent.

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‫Now, one thing that I will say again about these plans, this is very slow down because I'm explaining

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‫I want you to see me analyze and share my ideas so you can understand my thinking.

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‫So this is slower than normal.

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‫But when you write your plans do write in note form.

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‫There's no need in your plan to write full, grammatically accurate sentences with exciting vocabulary.

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‫This is not marked.

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‫Your plan is not marked.

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‫It's purely for you to plan your writing.

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‫And it's just a simple structure to help understand this and think about what content to include and

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‫also where to do it.

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‫So don't worry about writing long overviews.

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‫I often see students writing two or three really nicely written grammatical sentences.

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‫It's a bit of a waste of time.

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‫Save that for the report.

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‫OK, so that is my plan and I think pretty much I'm ready to start writing now.

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‫OK, so here we are.

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‫We've got a question up here if I want to reread.

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‫I've also included this vocabulary sheet.

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‫We looked at just a few lessons before taken from writing seven plus just a nice visualization to remind

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‫myself of describing trends increases, decreases figures that stay the same.

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‫So maybe good for comparing certain parts of language here.

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‫And of course, I have my visualization down here, so I think we can just jump into writing now.

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‫So what we need to do is to paraphrase these two sentences here now, I'm still going to write my paraphrased

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‫introduction in one sentences, and I'm going to do this by just simply going the charts display.

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‫Now, I've added the plural charts because here I'm basically saying the bar chart and the pie chart,

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‫the charts display the types of evening or we could say night classes that a range of ages.

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‫And we repeat that a range of ages roll into whatever.

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‫Let's read this back.

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‫The charts display the types of night classes that a range of ages enroll into are enrolled into.

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‫Let's say that sounds a little bit better to me.

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‫Again, editing as we write, really important.

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‫As with this back, the charts display the types of night classes that a range of ages are enrolled

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‫into.

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‫So I've said here the types of class and also the range of ages.

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‫So just really simple.

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‫One sentence paraphrased from these two longer structures.

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‫OK, time for the overview.

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‫So you'll remember, the first thing I said is that generally speaking, there are more women than males

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‫in most classes.

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‫Generally, there are more more there are more ladies, very British sounding than men in most class

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‫types.

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‫So I'm just saying that I could maybe write three out of four, but I try and keep numbers out of the

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‫overview.

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‫And when possible, generally there are more ladies than men in most class types.

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‫And then we want to say also

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‫for the most popular, the most let's say the most enrolled or shall we say the most frequent age age

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‫student is over 50 years old.

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‫Let's just read this back.

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‫Generally, there are more ladies than men in most classes.

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‫Change this short and sweet.

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‫Oh, apologies.

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‫Also the most frequent, the most frequent students.

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‫I think I need to rephrase this.

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‫Also, the most frequent aged students, also the students aged.

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‫I think we need to rewrite 50 years are over, make up the majority of students in all courses that

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‫much better editing when writing.

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‫Also, students aged 50 years or over make up the majority of students in all courses.

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‫OK, so a nice overview there for both visual pieces of information.

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‫OK, so group one is describing this bar chart now.

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‫How would I start?

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‫Well, I could go for a most popular and then sort of work my way down or simply I could just go from

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‫left to right along the x axis to make sure there were 30 students enrolled in drama classes with men

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‫making up ten versus twenty female students.

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‫And I think here we said students a lot.

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‫I'm going to say Lerner's

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‫painting was and I just want to compare painting to drama.

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‫Painting was more popular than drama classes.

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‫And I'm not going to say specifically I'm going to try and speed it up a little bit and just say with

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‫around 55 or with 55 total enrollments

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‫overall.

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‫Let's just read this back again.

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‫There were 30 students enrolled in drama classes with men making up 10 versus 20 female learners.

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‫Painting was more popular than drama class with fifty five total enrollments overall.

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‫Now, some of you may say, why don't you describe exactly how many poor men or female or male or female?

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‫And that's because sometimes if we describe every single feature is going to be far too long.

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‫So we kind of need to sometimes speed things up, sometimes slow things down, or let's say sculpture

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‫was not a popular class sculpture and I'll just change my spelling here.

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‫Sculpture was not a popular class with only how many, 15 students total.

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‫Whereas so now I've got a nice use of a complex sentence, most probably, whereas there were whereas

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‫languages was the most popular class with 20 male and with 20, let's say will use respectively with

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‫20 and with our tissues with 20 male and 40 female students each attending these lessons.

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‫OK, that's good.

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‫I've gone through everything here, I've made comparisons between them, I've given specific facts.

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‫I didn't really use any of this vocabulary.

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‫It didn't seem appropriate so much, most likely because of time.

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‫So this language is generally really useful for time, trends against time.

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‫OK, so let's describe the pie chart, 42 percent of all of of the student body.

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‫That's a nice colloquial piece of language there.

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‫The student body, which means just the overall number of students were aged 50 years.

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‫Ah.

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‫Or over or over.

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‫Next the next most popular age group was

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‫between 40 and 49 years of age at 26 percent, ascender 26 percent of enrolments.

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‫Then we could maybe say we could even probably if we want to speed things up just a little bit more,

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‫plus these together so we could say students aged under 39 or we could say students aged anywhere from

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‫thirty nine are younger, make up sixteen plus 11 plus 15.

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‫So this is 16, 32 percent.

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‫So then we can say students, this is very much speeding up our writing students aged.

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‫In fact, what I'm going to say is I'm going to pull up these two groups together because this is 16.

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‫This is 16.

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‫So I can say that equal.

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‫So what I'll say is students aged 30 to 39 stood at 16 percent equal to the remaining two age groups

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‫and are going to use brackets as well, 20 to 29 and aged 20 or under.

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‫OK, that kind of should mean that I have completed this writing here.

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‫I could maybe just say that age 20 and understand at five percent the lowest amount.

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‫But I think I'm quite happy with this.

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‫Let's read back this second paragraph here.

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‫42 percent of the student body were aged 50 years.

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‫Ah, or over.

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‫The next most popular age group was between 40 to 49 years of age.

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‫At 26 percent of enrollment's students aged 30 to 39 stood at 16 percent.

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‫And a nice comparison between some of the data equal to the remaining two age groups, 20 to 29 and

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‫age 20 or under.

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‫OK, I like that.

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‫I think that's pretty strong.

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‫Let me check my word count.

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‫It does look, maybe just a little short, but I think I've still made the 150 here.

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‫OK, so I've just counted up and very interesting worth discussing the word count for, this is 148

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‫words.

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‫So you remember that really the word limit stands out about 150 or higher.

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‫Now, I'm kind of two words under that.

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‫Would I get a penalty against my score?

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‫I very, very much doubt it.

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‫I've included a lot of information here, maybe just slightly sped this up too much.

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‫So I maybe could have gone through a bit more individually or just added an extra sentence with a bit

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‫more information.

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‫But it's really only if you're looking at, you know, very sure under 140, maybe another sentence

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‫taken away from here that we start giving penalties examiners.

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‫So that's fine.

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‫Not too much to worry about.

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‫Only a couple of words under.

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‫And that's mostly because I've added a lot of detail in here whilst making comparisons.

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‫So my task achievement score is, of course, very high.

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‫So, yeah, an interesting example of this mixed chart, multiple chart lessons.

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‫I really do like these kind of reports because they're quite easy to group and there's obviously a lot

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‫of things to describe as well.

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‫OK, so let's jump into your next lesson.