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‫Hello, everyone, and welcome back to your next lesson.

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‫Today, I'll be writing you a model answer for an ALS task, one writing question all about a bar chart.

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‫Today, there will be no lesson, no it as there's a lot of information being covered, as well as a

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‫lot of ideas that we'll be reviewing from previous lessons.

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‫Please no down any language that you find interesting from this lesson.

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‫First up, let's review the structure for answering a task.

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‫One question.

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‫The key reasons we use this force, that structure is so that you can score highly in task achievement,

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‫which makes up 25 percent of the band descriptors, your first paragraph is the introduction, which

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‫really is made of no more than two sentences and introduces your report to The Examiner.

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‫Next is your overview, which you must include to score band six or higher, he you report the main

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‫trends or the big picture of the visual information show.

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‫Finally is our two detailed paragraphs where you go into a lot more detail to report the features of

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‫the visual information show, I'll be using this structure today to write my model answer.

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‫Let's take a look at the question I'll be answering now.

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‫He is a typical alt writing bar chart, if we look at the title, it reads number of UK tourists visiting

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‫Thailand and Greece in millions on the key, we can see the two countries are Thailand and Greece.

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‫On the Y axis, we have the amount given in millions and on the x axis, we can see the four years from

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‫2010 to 2013.

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‫The chart shows numbers of UK tourists visiting two countries from 2010 to 2013.

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‫Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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‫We've seen our bar chart and we have our question now, the first thing that I and you should do is

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‫to make a short plan, the very same plan I showed you a few lessons ago.

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‫Here is our plan structure, which is group one, group two and overview.

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‫It's really important that you do this plan as it will help you to understand the chart or graph and

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‫to make sure you answer the question properly and score highly on task achievement.

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‫Let's take a look at my plan.

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‫As you should remember, the groups tell me what I need to write in each detail paragraph, so as there's

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‫only two countries, I've decided that Group one or detailed paragraph one will all be about Thailand,

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‫where as my second detailed paragraph will all be about Greece.

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‫For my overview section, I've identified that Thailand suffers a drop in the first year and steadily

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‫increases throughout, whereas Greece fluctuates largely.

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‫Now that I've looked at the bar chart in more detail and made a plan, it's time to move on to our first

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‫paragraph, the introduction.

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‫The key thing to remember here is that for the introduction, we simply need to paraphrase and reword

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‫this part of the question.

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‫That means I will have to use my understanding of synonyms to create my introduction.

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‫And here is what I wrote.

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‫The bar chart presents the amount of UK travelers visiting either Thailand, Greece over a four year

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‫period.

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‫Now, it's important to say that my introduction sentence really has very little difference between

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‫the question's first sentence.

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‫I've just used different vocabulary, to paraphrase.

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‫Let's take a deeper look at how I did this and what vocabulary I changed.

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‫Hey, I've identified three main changes that I made in my introduction, the first thing I changed

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‫was chart shows into a bar chart presents.

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‫I then changed numbers to amount and UK tourists to UK travellers, my last big change was in the final

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‫part of the sentence.

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‫I gave the name of the two countries and said it was over a four year period instead of 2010 to 2013.

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‫I hope you can see that cylinder are super useful in creating your introduction.

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‫Let's move on to our overview.

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‫It's important to remember that the overview paragraph should not contain any percentages, numbers

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‫or figures here, we will only quickly report the main trends that we can see in the visual information.

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‫Generally speaking, your overview doesn't need to be any longer than between two to four sentences.

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‫Let's take a look at what I wrote for my overview.

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‫Overall, both countries saw drops and increases in tourism over time, although Thailand saw an initial

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‫downturn, visiting travelers rose year on year thereafter.

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‫Greece saw big fluctuations in the numbers of people arriving in their country throughout the period.

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‫I began my overview with the word overall, and I recommend this as a great piece of vocabulary to start

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‫your overview.

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‫In my first sentence, I made a quick comparison between both countries and said they both saw drops

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‫and increases.

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‫My second sentence gave a quick summary of the major trends for Thailand and my third sentence summarize

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‫what happened to Greece over the four year period.

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‫And that's it.

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‫That's all I wrote for my overview.

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‫Now, here are some key points that you must remember when writing your own overview, it should not

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‫contain any dates or figures and the overview gives the overall trends, or, as I like to call it,

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‫the big picture, don't go into too much detail in this section of your report.

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‫That's all for the overview before we move on.

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‫Let's review our report structure.

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‫So here we are and we've completed the introduction and we've just worked through the overview section

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‫of our report.

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‫So now it's time to move on to our two detail paragraphs.

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‫The bar chart we're reporting on has two countries.

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‫And as you may remember from our plan, detailed paragraph one will all be about Thailand, whereas

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‫detailed paragraph two would describe the trends for Greece.

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‫He is my first detailed paragraph now, it's very important in both detailed paragraphs to really describe

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‫in detail all the facts and figures as there's only two countries in the bar chart I've described each

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‫year with the major trends and differences.

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‫In my first sentence, I gave the total of UK visitors to Thailand, but also made a comparison with

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‫Greece, saying that Thailand total was higher where possible.

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‫Do try and compare the data that you can see.

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‫I then went on to say that in 2011 the number dropped by 500000.

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‫Please do remember to give the correct figures as accuracy will help your mark.

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‫Finally, I reported the total number of visits to Thailand from UK tourists increased by 500000 each

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‫year, and I also went on to add the detail that the final figure in 2013 was Thailand's highest amount.

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‫Let's see the second detailed paragraph for Greece.

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‫I began my second detailed paragraph with a general statement saying that Greece's numbers fluctuated

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‫largely throughout the four years.

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‫I then started describing 2010 and gave the figure of 2.5 million.

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‫Next, I use rocketed to describe the big increase in 2011.

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‫Now you can see I said it was slightly under 4.5 million, whereas if I said the figure was 4.5 million,

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‫I would lose marks, as that is not correct.

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‫Importantly, I then describe the next decrease with the phrase more than halved, if you can do this

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‫by saying halved, quartered or use percentages such as 50 percent, 30 percent, and you can use them

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‫accurately.

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‫It shows the examiner that you have a lot of confidence and fluency in English.

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‫And quite simply, to finish my report, I gave the final figure for UK tourists in Greece and made

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‫a quick comparison between Greece and Thailand.

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‫So that's all for our model answer, reporting on a bar chart, we've seen our introduction, overview

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‫and both detailed paragraphs.

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‫I highly recommend reading through the full report, which is in an extra resource after this lesson.

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‫Next up, we'll look at another model answer at this time.

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‫The maps and processes.