1 00:00:00,440 --> 00:00:07,100 ‫Hello, everyone, and welcome back to your next lesson, all about alt writing task one. 2 00:00:07,670 --> 00:00:16,520 ‫Today we will learn how to organize and structure your writing into four simple parts here. 3 00:00:16,610 --> 00:00:17,780 ‫Your lesson note. 4 00:00:18,470 --> 00:00:23,630 ‫Firstly, you'll need to know how to write an organized Eilts task. 5 00:00:23,630 --> 00:00:31,210 ‫One report in four steps and you'll also understand what to write in each of the four steps. 6 00:00:31,760 --> 00:00:39,060 ‫But before moving on, I'd like to review some key information from the last few lessons to recap. 7 00:00:39,080 --> 00:00:46,400 ‫There are six pieces of visual information or different questions that you might see on ALTS writing 8 00:00:46,400 --> 00:00:54,350 ‫task, one that could be different kind of chart maps or processes which are actually like diagrams. 9 00:00:55,280 --> 00:01:02,780 ‫There is a suggested word count of a hundred and fifty plus words any less and your score will receive 10 00:01:02,780 --> 00:01:09,110 ‫a penalty, though you don't get more marks for writing more than one hundred and fifty words. 11 00:01:09,980 --> 00:01:15,800 ‫You have a recommended time limit of twenty minutes to complete this task. 12 00:01:16,520 --> 00:01:24,130 ‫And the task is to report the key features in the visual information that is presented to you. 13 00:01:24,950 --> 00:01:31,070 ‫That rounds up just a few important things we know about writing Task one. 14 00:01:31,460 --> 00:01:40,490 ‫And before we move on to our four steps, it might be worth asking why do I need to structure my report? 15 00:01:40,940 --> 00:01:47,950 ‫And to answer that will go back to the band descriptors in the band seven task achievement. 16 00:01:47,960 --> 00:01:58,670 ‫One descriptor it state presents a clear overview of main trends, differences or stages, and an overview 17 00:01:58,670 --> 00:02:00,740 ‫is included in the force. 18 00:02:00,740 --> 00:02:08,180 ‫That structure that I will teach you in this lesson and the band seven Coherence and Cohesion Descriptor 19 00:02:08,180 --> 00:02:08,870 ‫stays. 20 00:02:09,320 --> 00:02:14,290 ‫The student logically organizes information and ideas. 21 00:02:14,840 --> 00:02:17,600 ‫There is a clear progression throughout. 22 00:02:18,940 --> 00:02:26,350 ‫By using the four step structure, you can cross off these two points on the banned descriptors, so 23 00:02:26,350 --> 00:02:28,600 ‫it's very important to use it. 24 00:02:30,300 --> 00:02:38,790 ‫OK, so here is the force, that sequence, we begin with an introduction and then move to the overview, 25 00:02:38,820 --> 00:02:42,150 ‫which I mentioned is in the pan descriptors. 26 00:02:43,070 --> 00:02:51,230 ‫In previous lessons, I mentioned splitting the visual information into two groups, hey, you can see 27 00:02:51,230 --> 00:02:58,130 ‫we have two detailed paragraphs and this is where you can talk about the two groups of data from the 28 00:02:58,130 --> 00:02:58,760 ‫question. 29 00:02:59,730 --> 00:03:06,570 ‫I would highly suggest posing the video at this point in the lesson and writing the four steps down. 30 00:03:07,320 --> 00:03:14,880 ‫Now I'm going to go into each of the steps and explain in a lot more detail what you need to write and 31 00:03:14,880 --> 00:03:16,100 ‫how you can do it. 32 00:03:16,620 --> 00:03:19,620 ‫So let's move on to the introduction step. 33 00:03:20,900 --> 00:03:28,280 ‫Here is a task, one question, the bar chart shows the number of students attending three different 34 00:03:28,280 --> 00:03:38,330 ‫courses from 2001 to 2004 summarized the information by selecting and reporting the main features and 35 00:03:38,330 --> 00:03:43,000 ‫make comparisons where relevant on the vertical y axis. 36 00:03:43,010 --> 00:03:51,800 ‫We have students in millions and on the bottom x axis we have the four different yet to the right of 37 00:03:51,800 --> 00:03:52,650 ‫the bar graph. 38 00:03:52,670 --> 00:03:56,480 ‫There is a key which gives us the three different courses. 39 00:03:57,290 --> 00:04:05,270 ‫To write our introduction, we will need to paraphrase the question, which simply means to write it 40 00:04:05,270 --> 00:04:08,060 ‫again, but to use our own words. 41 00:04:08,370 --> 00:04:13,550 ‫However, that does not mean that we have to change every single word. 42 00:04:14,060 --> 00:04:18,290 ‫Let me show you my example of how I paraphrased the question. 43 00:04:19,860 --> 00:04:27,450 ‫The bar chart illustrates the total number of students enrolled into three different courses between 44 00:04:27,450 --> 00:04:30,660 ‫2001 to 2004. 45 00:04:31,750 --> 00:04:39,670 ‫As you can see, I haven't made huge changes to the question, and I've used my understanding of synonyms, 46 00:04:39,910 --> 00:04:48,280 ‫words that have the same meaning to reword and paraphrase the question instead of the bar chart shows 47 00:04:48,580 --> 00:04:49,600 ‫I've used. 48 00:04:49,600 --> 00:04:57,760 ‫The bar chart illustrates the number of students has been changed to the total number of students. 49 00:04:58,330 --> 00:05:02,440 ‫And I've used this synonym for attending which is enrolled. 50 00:05:03,430 --> 00:05:11,680 ‫My final change was to swap from to between, which is a top tip and something that you can use often. 51 00:05:13,040 --> 00:05:21,910 ‫I do recommend that your introduction is no longer than two sentences, but don't go into too much detail 52 00:05:22,070 --> 00:05:28,310 ‫and remember, to simply paraphrase the question and use synonyms to change the language. 53 00:05:28,850 --> 00:05:35,240 ‫Let me show you a few more examples that you could use, and it might be worth noting these down so 54 00:05:35,240 --> 00:05:36,710 ‫you can practice using the. 55 00:05:37,640 --> 00:05:49,130 ‫The graph chart table or map illustrates gives information, depicts, shows, represent or compares 56 00:05:49,130 --> 00:05:53,050 ‫and shows you'll notice the last phrase is in red. 57 00:05:53,060 --> 00:06:00,350 ‫And that's because if there's more than two charts, you can swap between compares and shows in your 58 00:06:00,350 --> 00:06:07,520 ‫paraphrased introduction, you may have noticed that I haven't mentioned process diagrams. 59 00:06:07,700 --> 00:06:11,840 ‫And there's a key phrase I want to teach you in this lesson. 60 00:06:12,680 --> 00:06:18,290 ‫The diagrams illustrate the way in which the product is produced. 61 00:06:18,740 --> 00:06:26,330 ‫The product could be a wide variety of things, but whatever the process diagram shows to produce, 62 00:06:26,600 --> 00:06:28,030 ‫you can put that there. 63 00:06:28,610 --> 00:06:36,200 ‫Now, the key phrase here is the way in which it's a very versatile phrase and can be used when describing 64 00:06:36,200 --> 00:06:39,010 ‫many different kinds of process diagrams. 65 00:06:39,200 --> 00:06:41,450 ‫So have a go at using it to. 66 00:06:42,470 --> 00:06:50,630 ‫Before we move on to our overview, I have an introduction challenge using either a notepad and pen 67 00:06:50,630 --> 00:06:52,180 ‫or the Q&A section. 68 00:06:52,400 --> 00:06:58,040 ‫I want you to write your own introduction for the question on this slide. 69 00:06:58,470 --> 00:07:01,580 ‫Don't copy my example too closely. 70 00:07:02,060 --> 00:07:03,470 ‫In the Q&A section. 71 00:07:03,470 --> 00:07:07,590 ‫You could get feedback from other students and I can read it, too. 72 00:07:07,650 --> 00:07:10,960 ‫So that might be a good place to post your answer. 73 00:07:11,860 --> 00:07:18,670 ‫Moving on to our next step, which is the overview, the first thing that we need to understand about 74 00:07:18,670 --> 00:07:23,200 ‫the overview is that to score a band six, you must include one. 75 00:07:23,740 --> 00:07:32,620 ‫The Band six Task Achievement Descriptor State presents an overview with information appropriately selected 76 00:07:33,190 --> 00:07:36,730 ‫and to score a band seven in task achievement. 77 00:07:37,000 --> 00:07:38,470 ‫The Descriptor states. 78 00:07:38,470 --> 00:07:45,160 ‫This presents a clear overview of main trends, differences or stages. 79 00:07:45,910 --> 00:07:52,540 ‫So as we can see, it's very important that we include an overview in our report. 80 00:07:52,990 --> 00:07:55,520 ‫But what exactly is an overview? 81 00:07:56,000 --> 00:07:57,640 ‫Let's take a look at that now. 82 00:07:58,510 --> 00:08:05,320 ‫Firstly, your overview should not contain a lot of specific figures and detail. 83 00:08:06,230 --> 00:08:14,810 ‫However, the overview should report the main trends or if you like, the big picture of the visual 84 00:08:14,810 --> 00:08:23,390 ‫information given to you, instead of saying car sales rose by 20 percent, you would simply say car 85 00:08:23,390 --> 00:08:24,830 ‫sales increased. 86 00:08:25,430 --> 00:08:28,580 ‫Give the big picture without figures. 87 00:08:29,570 --> 00:08:37,730 ‫As I previously said, if you want to score above Aband six and TASC achievement, your report must 88 00:08:37,730 --> 00:08:39,830 ‫include an overview. 89 00:08:40,250 --> 00:08:47,470 ‫And to score one, seven or higher, you must identify the main trends, differences or stages. 90 00:08:48,440 --> 00:08:50,390 ‫Let's see some examples now. 91 00:08:51,690 --> 00:09:00,060 ‫The line graph shows the percentage of recycling rates in three countries, and it's recorded across 92 00:09:00,210 --> 00:09:01,540 ‫six years. 93 00:09:02,340 --> 00:09:07,830 ‫Can you identify three general main trends in this graph? 94 00:09:08,190 --> 00:09:13,950 ‫And by that, I don't mean specific figures, just the overall picture. 95 00:09:14,760 --> 00:09:18,350 ‫What could you briefly say about each country? 96 00:09:18,630 --> 00:09:23,310 ‫And are there any similarities that you could quickly discuss? 97 00:09:23,970 --> 00:09:28,870 ‫Pause the video now and in note form, so not full sentences. 98 00:09:29,220 --> 00:09:37,530 ‫Try and identify three general trends in the line graph show and then I'll show you my ideas. 99 00:09:40,650 --> 00:09:47,430 ‫In the last lesson you may remember, I showed you some planning notes, well, here they are and it 100 00:09:47,430 --> 00:09:53,350 ‫also gives me the information for my overview, looking at my notes. 101 00:09:53,370 --> 00:09:57,600 ‫Can you work out what I might write in my overview? 102 00:09:58,990 --> 00:10:06,790 ‫The first thing to note is that I've grouped the UK and Germany together because they're recycling rates 103 00:10:06,790 --> 00:10:09,140 ‫follow a very similar trend. 104 00:10:09,910 --> 00:10:14,190 ‫France, however, has a completely different set of data. 105 00:10:14,560 --> 00:10:20,620 ‫So I would put that in group two and write about it in my second detailed paragraph. 106 00:10:21,340 --> 00:10:29,680 ‫The main trends I identified for my overview are that the UK and Germany have a steady, consistent 107 00:10:29,680 --> 00:10:35,860 ‫increase, whereas France has a slow downturn with a final rise. 108 00:10:36,700 --> 00:10:41,080 ‫Let's see how that would look in a fully explained overview. 109 00:10:43,130 --> 00:10:51,830 ‫Overall, the recycling rate of the UK and Germany rose steadily and consistently over the six years. 110 00:10:52,810 --> 00:10:59,680 ‫However, the percentage of waste recycled in France experienced a downward trend. 111 00:11:00,550 --> 00:11:08,020 ‫A few key points to mention would be I've highlighted overall, as I believe that is a key piece of 112 00:11:08,020 --> 00:11:11,830 ‫vocabulary that you should start your overviews with. 113 00:11:12,070 --> 00:11:13,820 ‫And do remember the comma. 114 00:11:14,470 --> 00:11:22,690 ‫You can see that I haven't mentioned any specific figures or percentage increases in my overview and 115 00:11:22,690 --> 00:11:26,920 ‫have just stuck to the main facts or the bigger picture. 116 00:11:27,550 --> 00:11:34,330 ‫For now, don't worry too much about specific vocabulary that will come in the next lesson. 117 00:11:35,720 --> 00:11:40,740 ‫Here is a quick review of the four step report structure. 118 00:11:41,300 --> 00:11:47,210 ‫We've completed our introduction and we've just looked at how to make an overview. 119 00:11:47,780 --> 00:11:54,290 ‫Now it's time to take a look at what is in a detailed paragraph and how we can write one. 120 00:11:55,440 --> 00:12:04,230 ‫I'd quickly like to return to the task one question which will remain the same every time, summarize 121 00:12:04,230 --> 00:12:12,030 ‫the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 122 00:12:12,810 --> 00:12:21,270 ‫The majority of our answers to this question will be in our two detailed paragraphs, and that's where 123 00:12:21,300 --> 00:12:26,130 ‫we'll be reporting the main trends, differences and similarities. 124 00:12:26,340 --> 00:12:28,320 ‫So they are very important. 125 00:12:28,780 --> 00:12:30,480 ‫But what do we need to include? 126 00:12:31,650 --> 00:12:38,910 ‫In the detailed paragraph, you have the report, the key features of the data shown to you, and this 127 00:12:38,910 --> 00:12:42,960 ‫must be done accurately or you risk losing marks. 128 00:12:43,740 --> 00:12:51,330 ‫Worth while in the body paragraph to give specific figures and to reference the visual information show, 129 00:12:51,960 --> 00:12:55,800 ‫you also need to logically organize your writing. 130 00:12:55,950 --> 00:13:01,700 ‫And that's where splitting the data into two groups is very useful. 131 00:13:02,950 --> 00:13:12,280 ‫Now we'll look at three examples of body paragraphs, starting with charts and graphs, these two pie 132 00:13:12,280 --> 00:13:19,960 ‫charts show the contribution to the economy of Turkey split into eight different sectors. 133 00:13:21,850 --> 00:13:30,460 ‫I've decided to split into two groups by the sectors that increased and the sectors that decreased or 134 00:13:30,460 --> 00:13:31,530 ‫stayed the same. 135 00:13:32,620 --> 00:13:37,550 ‫This means I can write a paragraph for each of my two groups. 136 00:13:38,410 --> 00:13:43,540 ‫Here is my first detailed paragraph where our report on Group one. 137 00:13:44,910 --> 00:13:52,050 ‫Please do pause the video and read through this detailed paragraph, you may notice that I'm going to 138 00:13:52,050 --> 00:13:59,790 ‫describe all eight sectors, but it's worth remembering that often you don't have to describe every 139 00:13:59,790 --> 00:14:01,290 ‫single piece of data. 140 00:14:03,380 --> 00:14:10,910 ‫Here is example, too, and we're going to be looking at the body or detailed paragraph for this map 141 00:14:10,910 --> 00:14:19,190 ‫here, it might be good practice for you to look at this map and ask yourself the four key questions 142 00:14:19,340 --> 00:14:28,250 ‫from the last letter I can see the map is comparing the key features of a town called Stopford in the 143 00:14:28,250 --> 00:14:31,640 ‫year 1930 and 2010. 144 00:14:32,300 --> 00:14:37,970 ‫Let's take a look at the detailed paragraph I wrote for this piece of visual information. 145 00:14:38,390 --> 00:14:44,530 ‫I have split this map into two groups east and west of the main central road. 146 00:14:45,170 --> 00:14:52,070 ‫Let's see my answer for the first detailed paragraph or any development made east of the main road. 147 00:14:54,350 --> 00:15:02,390 ‫You may notice there is one part of the town east of the main central road that I haven't mentioned 148 00:15:02,390 --> 00:15:07,180 ‫in my detailed paragraph, and it actually remained unchanged. 149 00:15:07,670 --> 00:15:10,500 ‫Can you see what I haven't discussed? 150 00:15:11,060 --> 00:15:14,540 ‫You can post your answers in the Q and A section. 151 00:15:15,660 --> 00:15:23,970 ‫Now onto our final example, which is all about detailed paragraphs for processes, the diagram here 152 00:15:23,970 --> 00:15:31,050 ‫shows us the process of creating or manufacturing bricks, which are often used in construction. 153 00:15:31,590 --> 00:15:38,310 ‫Now, let's see how I grouped my data and also take a deeper look at my detailed paragraph. 154 00:15:39,760 --> 00:15:47,140 ‫For the process of brick manufacturing, I simply spit the diagram into the first three steps and the 155 00:15:47,140 --> 00:15:53,940 ‫second group was the four last steps, pulls the video and read through this detailed paragraph. 156 00:15:54,790 --> 00:16:01,030 ‫You can see I've gone into quite some detail to explain each of the stages. 157 00:16:01,330 --> 00:16:03,640 ‫And that's also a key word. 158 00:16:04,300 --> 00:16:10,990 ‫Remember, for processes, we simply describe each of the stages in the diagram. 159 00:16:12,160 --> 00:16:18,980 ‫That brings us to the end of this lesson, all about structuring and organizing our answer. 160 00:16:19,420 --> 00:16:24,300 ‫I think you'll agree there was a lot of information and it was really packed. 161 00:16:25,090 --> 00:16:27,670 ‫Please review your lesson, know it. 162 00:16:27,670 --> 00:16:31,580 ‫And if you have any questions, use the Q&A feature. 163 00:16:32,110 --> 00:16:40,480 ‫Also, I would recommend maybe going through parts of this lesson again and remember to take notes all 164 00:16:40,480 --> 00:16:42,550 ‫the best and I'll see you in the next lesson.